Films and computer games which contain violence are very popular. Some people believe they have a negative effect on society and so should be banned. Other people, however, say they are just harmless and help people to relax. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In the contemporary epoch, there is a common phenomenon among children of playing and watching violent content. Whilst some individuals are of the belief that these kinds of video
games
and
movies
have a plethora of demerits on the community and should be prohibited by the government, others have a diverse view. I strongly agree that films and video computer
games
which contain violent scenes have detrimental consequences on the offspring. In the following lines, both merits and demerits,
along with
my perspective, will be
further
demonstrated. On one hand, aggressive video
games
and cinematic films have dire consequences on children’s behaviour
such
as suicide and killing people.
In other words
, the crime rates among youngsters have risen significantly in the meantime after playing brutal war
games
like PUBG.
For instance
,
according to
an article that has been published in the Ahram Weekly newspaper, the root cause of the investigations of youth crimes committed in Egypt in 2020 and 2021 was the negative influence of the
movies
and
games
which contain attacking and killing scenes.
Hence
, if the government and parents draw more attention to the behaviour of the youngsters,
this
will significantly alleviate the youth crimes in a proactive way before facing deleterious effects on the community.
Nevertheless
, despite the disadvantages mentioned above, viewing violent
movies
and
games
may have an un-harmful contribution to children’s attitudes based on several factors. To illustrate, the Interpersonal skills of the young generations have improved significantly after playing strategic war
games
like language and communication skills.
This
is exemplified by a survey conducted by a group of students
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Ain Shams University, students who played Fifa with foreign peers have achieved high grades
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English language tests in Egypt.
This
example shows that these entertaining action
games
may shape better future of children in Arab countries like Egypt and will improve their mental health, and open-mindedness and broaden their horizons. In conclusion, after presenting the aforementioned points, it can be reiterated that
playing
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attacking computer
games
and action
movies
is a double-edged weapon. I strongly believe that these sorts of
games
and
movies
will negatively impact children’s behaviour and
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the youth crime rates in the community.
Therefore
, the government and fathers and mothers shall employ censorship to protect the offspring from violent content and sensitive virtual images.
Submitted by Mohamed Abdel Wanis on

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task response
Well done on presenting both views and clearly stating your own opinion. Make sure to further analyze and discuss the impact of violent content on society in more depth.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Try to link your ideas more smoothly to enhance coherence.
task response
Presented both sides of the argument effectively
coherence and cohesion
Strong introduction and conclusion

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