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In many modern socities grandchildren rarely spend any quality time with their grandparents. what do you think are the consequences of this?

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In the
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 ,decades families are getting smaller , and most people prefer privacy and choose to move out of home after getting married or higher education .
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 , grandchildren get less chance to spend quality
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 with their
grandparents
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. There are so many consequences of
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 phenomenon which will be discussed in a
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 paragraph with a suitable conclusion.
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 ,with the reason, why grandchildren rarely spend
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 with
grandparents
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 ,
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 , because nowadays both the
parents
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 are working and they are not staying near to their
parents
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 ,
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 they cannot get a chance to spend quality
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 with the elder person in their family .Another reason could be due to their parent's egos means that their
parents
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 don't have a good bonding with their
parents
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 or
parents
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-in-law.
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 , after getting married daughters-in-law are not able to adjust to the new family and they move out to some different place,
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 their offsprings have less chance to interact with their
grandparents
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. Now coming to the consequences,
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 and foremost , adolescents lost the opportunity to spend their most precious
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 enjoying their childhood.
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 , I remember my childhood and my grandmother used to live with us , she spent so much
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 cooking dishes for me and I never had to worry about living alone as if my
parents
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 are not at home , my grandma is always there to help us in cooking or rest of the household chores.
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 , spending
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 with older person give adolescents
time
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 to learn about their culture and family values, and they remain more motivated about their career without forgetting their roots. Most importantly , They learn to respect the older people in society as they know how to behave with their
grandparents
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. To sum up , nowadays
parents
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 are busy and living far from their loved ones which is the major reason that grandchildren get less quality
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 with their
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, which could lead them to lose their family values and culture in future .
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