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Band 3.5

"Some people think that some subjects such as mathematics and philosophy ought to be optional instead of compulsory"

t is commonly held belief that mathematics and philosophy or
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subjects
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 are beneficial tools for some reasons, even though some
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people
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 have thoughts about these studies
have
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not
to be
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 compulsory. Personally, I completely agree that
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studies should
to
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be optional because it might occur that some
students
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 have enthusiasm for
another
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another subject
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subjects
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 or they may wish to
be
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owner diverse work which is not identified. One reason why
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as
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subjects
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 have to be like a volunteer is
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 they might like various
type
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types
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 of studies and in
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case
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 special enthusiasm will
created
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 within their
moral
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.
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, if they learn other
subjects
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 which they have not
any
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curious
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 about them
such
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 as math and philosophy compulsorily, they will lose whole
interests
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interest
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 and
also
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 fall behind with study of
favorite
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 classes. Another reason is that
students
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 might desire to make work
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 as a painter tool, artist, actor, makeup staff or like these professions which
ones
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require creativity. According to scholars, if
students
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 are directed to an area of interest, they may be luckier than others because to do what they love. In conclusion, I would maintain that
although
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 some
subjects
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such
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 as mathematics and philosophy are beneficial tools for
students
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, parents and educators refer them to
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studies
studeis
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studies
 of interest.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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