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Some think that politicians should always be honest while others feel that there are times when they must lie. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#think #politicians #times
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 be honest whilst
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other thinks that vice versa is correct and they should
also
 lie
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 certain times. I personally reckon that
,
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 telling some lies can be considered
as
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acceptable. Politicians nowadays are one of the main figures that drive the world
towards
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 many directions in terms of financial, religious, and some other aspects and for doing them, telling lie is a must in
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specific circumstances. Leading the countries and managing all the people from
offsprings
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 to the old demands a strong will and perfect seriousness;
for example
, if there is
possibility
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 of
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attacks
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terrorist groups, civilians must not be disturbed in advance and leaders have to convince them everything is going well and
then
, the problem must be solved with the help intelligence agency or some special forces quietly. In the end, crucial details can be shared by the civil people.
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, the democracy in
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some countries demands that every news
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 to be divided equally between
government
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the government
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 and the civilians and global news agencies must press all of the happenings as how they happened. Due to the fact that some societies accept
this
 situation as a sign of truth and being
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 the same side with their government system and proud of it;
therefore
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democracy makes every
details
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 transparent. In the conclusion, with respect to
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some
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 safety issues, I believe that
privacy
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the privacy
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 of the documents or news
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 very important and should be protected by giving misinformation by politicians.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • integrity
  • transparency
  • ethical dilemma
  • diplomatic tact
  • misinformation
  • public trust
  • social fabric
  • national security
  • pragmatic politics
  • democratic principles
  • accountability
  • role models
  • grey area
  • public perception
  • preventive secrecy
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