Education should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All leveld of education, from primary school to tertiary education, should be free. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

Education
is one of the factors
that is
important the most for a live life. The more you study, the more you have knowledge.
This
factor is a basic thing which
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in each country should have since they are born.
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, some
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government's still ignore
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affected
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their people to attempt so hard to access
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education
. In my inspective, I agree just studying should be accessible to their citizen to all level
then
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To begin
with, the instruction should be accessible to all people in
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, but start from primary
school
to senior high
school
then
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, they should prepare their expense
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themselves
. Because I think, the level of
education
that I mentioned above is the basic knowledge that
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can provide
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to their citizen.
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part have a significant role as well. One of
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is take
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care of their children
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and provide them
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good
education
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university
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. Government can provide essential to their backbone after children learnt from it
then
they can make the decision to choose what should they study in the future base on
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knowledge
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that they got from
school
period.
Furthermore
, parents have a gap time to save
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money for their kids'
education
in the future as well.
Besides
, governments' have
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scholarships
for students as well, it depends on
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the condition
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that they set up. To summarise, all
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of society should get instruction that
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by
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until high
school
then
tertiary duration should
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their parents. The more backbone
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better
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education
, the more you get efficient people in your country.
Also
, they are part of new generations to
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develop
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country
in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessible
  • economic backgrounds
  • tertiary education
  • equal opportunities
  • workforce
  • innovation
  • social cohesion
  • class divide
  • government budgets
  • compromised quality
  • investment
  • future earnings
  • global competition
  • implementation
  • funding
  • administration
  • infrastructure
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