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Many schools these days have problems with poor student behaviour. Why do you think these problems occur? What could be done to tackle these problems.

#schools #student #behaviour
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 rules are one of the most important things in almost
schools
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. But nowadays,
schools
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 are facing a growing
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 with student code of conduct.
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 essay will look at the reason why
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 behave illegally and propose some solutions to address them. One of the main causes of the
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 is that
parents
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 nowadays are becoming easygoing and have a tendency to let
children
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 free to do whatever they want, do not establish clear boundaries and some rules of communication in a polite way. As a consequence, spoilt
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behavior
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 and naughty character are shaped
children
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’s personalities. To tackle
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problem
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,
schools
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 should talk to
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 about their offspring and suggest they participate more in educating
children
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. Another
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 is that media and digital technology are becoming more and more developed, they cover everywhere in the world.
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 development cause
children
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 to spend a long time keep eyes glued to screens, computers and smartphones.
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 led
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 to distraction status and increased the risk of disruptive
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behavior
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. Dealing with
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 issue involves
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 should monitor their
children
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’s activity on social networks and not
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 them spend too many hours on technology devices. A
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 cause of the
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 is that nowadays
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 are allowed to bring smartphones to
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.
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 has resulted in most
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 using mobile and they send messages, chat and even watch youtube videos while teachers are learning in the classroom. The way forward could be to
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 prohibit
children
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 to use smartphones in
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, especially while attending lessons. To sum up, the number of poor
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behavior
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children
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 in
school
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 is increasing.
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 situation has become a challenge for many
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.
Parents
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 and teachers should put so much effort into managing and controlling
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 both in
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 and at home.
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