In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing, and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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Recently, there is a significant increase in the resident's weight while
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downward trend is observed in the levels of
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and fitness. The main reasons for
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vary and
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problem should be resolved
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ways. The root
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that lead to
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weight increase is maintaining
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sedentary
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. due to the daily hectic schedule People often suffer from the huge pressure so back to their home after a long day working they just relax and do not want to do anything else including exercise.
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that, lack of time is the result of consuming too much fast food, a fat-based and sugary diet namely
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, fried chicken, soft
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,vv…and sitting in front of the screen many hours in a row is one of the main reason that
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obesity, diabetes in the youngster in recent years. There are several resolutions to tackle
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problem above. One of them is the change in their own
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by arranging their time properly to make sure they could spend time doing physical exercise regularly and balance their diet by consuming more vegetables, fruit or some products that are healthy.
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, people should have periodic
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to have the treat
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as soon as possible.
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,
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plays a crucial role in our
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so we should maintain a healthy
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to get
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • exercise
  • unhealthy diet
  • fast food
  • urbanization
  • modernization
  • stress
  • awareness
  • education
  • government intervention
  • policies
  • promotion
  • sports
  • fitness programs
  • health education
  • taxation
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • parks
  • recreational spaces
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