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car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past 30 years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. how to do you think this statement is? what measures can government take to discourage people from using their cars.

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The possession of
cars
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 has increased very fast over the past time period of 30 years that majority of cities in the world are now 'one big
traffic
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 jam'.As far as my opinion is concerned,I totally agreed with the statement because
traffic
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 jam is one of the major problems in the world.
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 with, the problem is caused by
cars
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.
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,
cars
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 produce noise pollution because of their engine and because of horns.
Secondly
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,air pollution occurred because of their engines when they are heated.
Thirdly
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,now everyone has their own car because of
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 there is too much
traffic
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 in every country of the world.And people who are going to school, colleges, university or jobs they are getting late because of
traffic
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 jams.
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,the solution to
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 problem is that government should apply huge taxes on
cars
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 and they should rise the prices of
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 because of
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 not everyone will afford to take
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 only a few people will afford it.
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,they should ban huge trucks on small roads and with ,
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 they should make a law in which they ban private
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 in busy places in busy times.
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 the government should tell people that use public transport for short visits.Because of these solutions, there will be less
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 as compared in past To conclude my essay I must say that, the government should apply these solutions fastly if they apply these things slowly there will be more
cars
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 on the road as compared to the past.In the end,we have to solve
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 problem before it gets too late
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