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An increasing number of people are changing careers during their working life. What do you think are the reasons of this? Is it a positive or a negative development for society?

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In a fast-growing ,word it is very important for us to learn more skills and keep developing ourselves and it will create the new opportunities we have to grab it sometimes it is in the forwarding direction or sometimes it is different from routine
work
. I strongly believe that changing careers path after starting earning is in the favour of society.
This
 will be discussed in
this
 essay. To commence with that, In the modern ear anyone can learn at any age whether it is related to their stream or not and it will help to increase the literacy ration of the nation ,
Moreover
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 it will increase competition in the market and motivate the employee to enhance their working capacity and the hard
work
 pay off
change
 the filed as per desire and current requirement. for
this
 instance, sometimes pupils while they choose the field they might not know very well about the practical implication
therefore
 at the end of completion of the study and doing the job they face certain types of problem like they cannot produce aspected output or it might be loos the interest of
work
. So, in
this
 result worker start thinking to
change
 job and doing whatever he/she wants to do as per their interest because having an interest in
work
 will kill a person's personal life or
work
 life. In a recent survey of online ,studies 70% of people take subscriptions to online courses and they came online to add more degrees to the curriculum and
also
 learn what they have yet not done and
give
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 one more chance to their passion. In recent ,time there are many streams which might be highly affected due to technology, infrastructure and covid pandemic it will
change
 the working style as before
this
 decade. so nowadays people are constantly working
work
 on their resumes to make strong and improve their knowledge and
change
 their job as per the opportunity
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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