Many people think young people should follow tradition, others argue that young people should be free to be individuals. Discuss both views.

Most citizens
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that young generations should continue
traditions
, while others say that these
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teenagers
teen years
teenayears
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teenagers
should be free to be individuals.
Although
young people should be free as individuals, I believe it is essential to know their
traditions
and roots in
life
. On the one hand, young citizens need to feel free as
human
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being
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to know who they are, and what they want in
life
to experience their preferences.
Firstly
, it is vital to discover their likes to
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fulfil
fullfill
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fulfil
their dreams and aspirations to reach the highest level as
human
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being
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.
Also
, it is highly recommendable to reach
a
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mental health that
allow
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a person to have balance in
life
.
For instance
, In The United States, children
are allow
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are allowed
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to change classes if they feel uninterested
on
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the
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academic topic, so
this
allow
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allows
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them to reach a higher level of education.
However
, I believe it is crucial to know where people come
,
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and
to
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know their history to avoid feeling confused in
life
.
On the Other hand
, knowing your
traditions
, customs as well as your roots in
life
,
these
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will give you
a
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a bast experience
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bast
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experiences from your ancestors to become a wiser person.
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,
be
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willing to read and learn from family's customs
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will
wiil
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will
bring you a sense of
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to be identified with them. To explain
further
, foreign parents who live in The United States, make sure their children know well about their
traditions
, language, and values in
life
to assure they will continue with their
tradition
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even though
eventhough
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even though
they live in a foreign country like California. I believe
this
is a preferable way to live because it gives a clear identity of
who
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a person comes from in
life
, and avoid them to feel lost in a foreign country. To
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conclude
conlcude
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conclude
,
although
it is
great
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idea to let them feel free in
life
, and allow them to
chose
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what they want, it is preferable to teach them about their culture and
traditions
to help them feel identified with their roots.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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