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The given pie charts illustrate the
percentage
 of three different
water
 usages, namely industrial, agricultural, and domestic
use
 in six areas of the world. Overall, it is noticeable that the
percentage
 of agricultural
use
 comprised the largest
percentage
 in most of the countries, whereas in North
America
 and Europe, the most used
water
 is for industrial purposes. Looking
first
 at Africa, central Asia and southeast Asia, a significant proportion of
water
 is used for agriculture, at 84, 88 and 81 per
cent
.
By contrast
, the
percentage
 of
water
 used for domestic and industrial purposes all comprised less than 10 per
cent
, only with an exception in south-east Asia with 12 per
cent
 in industrial
use
. Moving onto North
America
, and Europe, they show a similar pattern in
water
 usage. The most used
water
 can be seen in industrial
use
, at 53 and 48 per
cent
, and that of domestic
use
 are both around 14 per
cent
. As for South
America
, 71 per
cent
 of the
water
 is used for agriculture, which is much higher than that in North
America
 and Europe at 39 and 32.
However
, none of the figures for domestic and industrial
use
 in South
America
 is over 20 per
cent
.
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