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In future all cars, busses and trcuks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passangers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Transportation
 , the backbone of modern civilization has many forms .
Transportation
 by land, water and air, with the advancement in technology our modes of
transportation
 have improved and will continue to improve over the course of nature.
Driverless
vehicles
 have been
a
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 talk of
town
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 for quite some time now, and in
future
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 it is possible that modes of travelling only consist of passengers and no driver.
This
 essay will discuss
advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages of
driverless
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a driverless
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vehicle
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vehicles
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. The concept of
driverless
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the driverless
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automobile
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automobiles
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 is
very
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 thing of the future, and in
future
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 it is possible for
such
mode
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a mode
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 of
transportation
 to
exist
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.
This
 will completely change everything, we waste
lot
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 of our time driving and if
this
 time is applied correctly we can achieve various goals. With the help of
such
vehicles
, one can attend meetings, take important business
decision
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, relax,
play
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and play
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 games all
this
 while reaching your destination. About 90% of accidents
is
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 the result of human error. With the introduction of
self drive
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self-drive
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automobiles
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automobile
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 it will completely change, there will be
less
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 accidents and roads will be
much
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the much
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 safer
place
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then
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 ever before. As everyone
know
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, with advantages
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disadvantages
disadvantges
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and disadvantges
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 are bound to come. As there are advantages of
driverless
 cars/trucks
it
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also
have
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 its fair share of disadvantages. With the introduction of
driverless
vehicles
, many people will lose
there
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source
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a source
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 of income as some part of the human population are drivers and it will be hard to relocate them . Other than that,
though
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apply
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driverless
vehicle
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vehicles
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 can prevent many accidents because the ai have been trained for it. But , if there comes a situation that they are not trained for these
vehicles
 will dive right into it causing havoc. Even with
this
beautifull
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beautiful
 idea, it
have
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 its fair share of issues but that does not mean that
driverless
vehicles
 should not
developed
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 . There is always a solution to every problem present in the world. Rather than giving up on
such
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beautiful
beautifull
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 idea, we should focus on how we can counter its negative part . So that world can prosper and grow.
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