Some people belives that having sports in schools is a waste of time and resources, However other people belives that sport in schools is a vital part of education. discuss both this views and give your opinion.

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is good for all ages and most for

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but few individuals are against it. They

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teachers should prevent

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from playing

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that playing

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is good for

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it is best for

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am going to represent both views and give you my opinion. On one hand, people think that

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give less focus on their

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it, individuals think that it is good for kids to give their full

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study

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because now today era is for people with higher education, parents didn't want their

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of money. To explain,

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things for every

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of money.

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things.

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children

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class during their

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they become low spirited when they face hurdle but playing sports calm their mind and body. Another point to add,

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them clear their mind and they can easily concentrate on their

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them relax and

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. In my opinion, it is good for

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to play

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in schools so they can feel good and relax in

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busy and

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competitive

era. To conclude, it is good for

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study

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hard and give in their all but they don't have to

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is important so that our body become fit and healthy and we can focus on our

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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