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The leaders of most organizations tend to be older people. However, some argue that younger people make better bosses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that the higher
position
 of a company should
be hold
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(held) by an older member, while some believe that youngsters can do
this
 job better. In my opinion, I completely agree with the statement that young people are more up-to-date about the modern world and flexible to
work
.
First
 of all, young people are significantly energetic,
that
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help
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 them to hold
the
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leading
position
of
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 any organization. They are physically and mentally strong enough, which makes them eager to take
any
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 new challenges and overcome
with
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them with
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 new experiments and resources.
Such
 characteristics are highly encouraged by other employees of the organization, and they are very keen
to
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 their
work
. That helps to company’s development.
For example
, nowadays we can see
on
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 the newspaper that the young generation
are
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 highly encouraged to hold any political
position
 or managing director
position
 in any multinational
companies
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company
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. Young executives are
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open-minded
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open minded
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 as they are willing to accept new ideas for
growth
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the growth
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 of the company.
Secondly
, young managers are very passionate about the latest technological innovations, so they are always up-to-date,
how
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 the world is progressing day by day. They are very much used to
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the latest technology,
such
 as
Internet
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the Internet
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, smartphone, laptop, tab etc., which makes their
work
 easier, even
they
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if they
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 are working
from
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remotely. It saves their important time as well.
For example
, many advertising
company
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companies
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 get
new
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a new
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idea
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ideas
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 from
Internet
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 and promote their product in an innovative way.
Thus
, the youth can change the traditional way of thinking and bring the organization to a profitable
position
. To conclude, I strongly believe that
young
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 generation
are
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 more capable
for
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a
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managing
position
 than
the
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older people because they are dynamic and
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forward-thinking
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forward thinking
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forward-thinking
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 at their
work
, which demands
for
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a
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leadership.
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