Most people are not interested in how their food has been produced. They only care about how much it costs. How true is this statement? What influences people when they buy food?

Overtime
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, everything cone into very easy include having what you eat.
As a result
,
people
have many different choices when they decide to buy
food
for their
family
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families
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. Most
people
shop to suit their lifestyle. Some singer
people
often do not have
many
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time so they tend choice
food
what
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can help them save time like
:
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fast
food
, .. and they do not worry about money.
On the other
hand
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some
family
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families
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have many
people
likely to think about their finance because they only have a little money.
Besides
many
people
have plenty of time and they do not worry about money. They care carefully
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about aspect
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aspect
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aspects
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that
include
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includes
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quality
and
original
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originality
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. They may
choice
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choose
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what
having
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has
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good
quality
, organic and fresh. Having
good
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a good
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meal
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meals
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and healthy
is
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are
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important
with
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them. Another
choicing
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choice
food
to buy
also
affect
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where you live. If you
was
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were
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born and
breed
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bred
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in my country, you always had fresh
food
and healthy. Because it is my country is placed on
food
so the is not issue important. In
conclusion
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it
seem
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seems
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that cost is only one
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issue
isue
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issue
to
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for
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people
consider
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considering
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choice
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choosing
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food
. Some
people
look at
price
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the price
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before
quality
others
concerned
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are concerned
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quality
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with quality
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food
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