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In the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.

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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.
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 following paragraph explain explains my disagreement and the reason why. Even though
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technology gave the
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easement
ease
easment
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 in doing things, it doesn't always mean that we will leave everything "old" left behind.
One
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having and reading printed books.
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hobbies, reading books or newspaper in
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 give some advantages rather than
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it
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 online.
One
 of them is avoiding too much exposure
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 monitor display displays that causing
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 disturbance
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 the eyesight. We already spent our time on the monitor at school, and at work, and doesn't it seem enough for us to look at the bright display during
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 day?
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 social media. The
second
, the thing "without any payment"
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 two main things to consider.
One
 is the
quality
 of the article or the book, and the other
one
 is the
legallity
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legality
. As many online media keep appearing nowadays, many of them
also
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 the untrue information.
Thus
 we need to have a layered filter in the news consumption. It can be started from the headlines. For
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the
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headlines
that
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contain
controversial
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word
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, or
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what we
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 usually called
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as
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clickbait
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click bait
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. If we don’t read and understand the content, we might have
contanst
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content
 constant
assumption
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 as we read the headline. In fact,
that is
 not what really
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 on the news. If we find a well-known and
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quality
 novel, and we have
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full access to read it online,
then
 it might be 99% pirated novels. Because there must be
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 effort for the production of
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quality
 novels. The Same things happen to
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online newspaper, some
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quality
 media gave an option to subscribe to their news with
certain
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payment monthly.
Furthermore
, not all novels or newspapers are always available online, reading them in a printed way is
one
 of the options.
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