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Traditions are about the past and innovation is about the future, and it has been argued that we need to let go of traditions for the sake of progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? What role should traditions have in our lives? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is a saying that
traditions
 are only about the past, which means we need to get rid of
traditions
 in the future. I totally disagree with it and
this
 essay will explain the role of
traditions
 in our lives.
Traditions
 are not only about the past but
also
 have significant effects
in
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on
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 society. They are symbols of
country
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the country
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, diversity of the world is
also
showed
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shown
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 by
this
. If we do not protect our
traditions
, as time goes by,
it
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they
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 will
becomes
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 fewer and fewer, and some domestic cultures will be replaced by other
poweful
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powerful
 foreign countries which means it will be less culture in the world, and the world will become lack vitality.
Also
,
people
 will lose their
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identity
indentity
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identity
of
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the
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 domestic country. If we do not have our
traditions
,
people
 will lose their national identity, which makes them not treat others as a
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community
commutity
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community
, and
people
 will become more and more separated. Nowadays,
as
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development
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a devleopment
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devleopment
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development
 of technology
that
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we change our way of life and work which is different from
traditions
. On the one hand, we use some modern technology in our daily life,
for instance
, computers and the internet which can help us to work and study more efficient.
On the other hand
,
traditions
are
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also
 remain in our lives,
for example
, many
people
 keep the tradition of hunting fishers on a wooden boat in Northeast China, which is an excellent way to entertain
instead
 of a mode of production, and it can let us remember our ancient's lifestyle. In conclusion, I do not think that we have to get rid of our
traditions
, and
traditions
 can provide
people
about
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 historical knowledge and a way of entertainment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • heritage
  • continuity
  • progress
  • innovative
  • cultures
  • societal advances
  • integration
  • cultural tapestry
  • ideologies
  • reconciled
  • evolved
  • adapted
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