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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in foreign countries. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweighs the drawbacks?

#students #study #colleges #universities #countries
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Nowadays, the physical borders are being treated only as a geographical
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 of a country, and
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everything
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 in the world is so connected that going abroad for
education
 seems very easy. Most
of
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the
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students
, in today's time, prefer to go to foreign countries in order to pursue their higher
education
. In
this
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benefits
 of going abroad clearly
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 the drawbacks of foreign
education
. Let us try to understand the two most common drawbacks that people
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, and the
first
 one is staying away from the family.
Intially
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 in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary. , many
students
also
 experience
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, because they will only be able to see their family either once a year or, in
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 case, once in two years.
Moreover
, a few people find moving into a different
education
 system as another obstacle.
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 of student highlights that in their home country, the major focus used to be on
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theoretical
theoritical
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theoretical
 learning,
however
, now they have to learn by doing themselves and the professors are there just to guide them in the right direction.
Although
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 seems to be a challenge
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, later
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 they see
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exponential growth in their
life
. The
benefits
 of going to a foreign university are numerous. There is no doubt that the
students
 will face various challenges in the new country, but all these adverse situations prepare them for any challenge in their
life
.
Such
students
 are generally seen to perform extremely well in
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work
life
.
In addition
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this
, there is no doubt
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 the fact that foreign countries provide
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 quality of
education
 and imparts higher skills, which prepare
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students
 to become
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global citizen and work in any part of the world. No drawback can defeat
such
benefits
 of studying in foreign colleges. In conclusion, just like two sides of a coin, going abroad for studies has
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 own set of concerns. The
benefits
,
however
, are far more fruitful and develop the
students
 into
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 independent and
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person
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 who can face any tough situation personally or professionally
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 and can always succeed in their
life
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cross-cultural understanding
  • Specialized courses
  • Personal growth
  • Financial strain
  • Tuition
  • Cultural differences
  • Isolation
  • Homesickness
  • Educational systems
  • Academic performance
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