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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why this might be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being sellf-employed?

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In recent times, many people prefer to work as freelancers
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 of working as employees in companies or organisations . In
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essay I will discuss why freelancing is considered more flexible and the main drawbacks of being self-employed. The main reason behind
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 increasing trend is that people think freelancing is more flexible than being employed.
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 who is working in the organisation has to work according to his duty times or in the case of freelancing he just has to complete his task rather than thinking of their working hours , that
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 is free to select his working time as per his own choice.
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 we can say , that the self-employed
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 is free to work as per his own preference. Despite
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being advantageous for some people , it
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 has its own disadvantages .
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 is always worried about his income as there is no permanent source of income .
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 need to face many other obstacles , which are not easy to overcome In
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 I showed you some of the main reasons
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 choosing self-employment as their
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preference
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 to be as an employee in any company . In my ,opinion I prefer to struggle as an employee rather than to be
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 the reason behind
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 was the unpredictable future.
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