People in many countries are spending less time with their family. What are the reasons, and effects of this?

Nowadays ,in some countries ,the
time
with family is less taken. There are various reasons that
causes
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to
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this
problem. The
first
compelling reason why people spend less
time
with their family is that in recent years, thanks to the development of economics, many individuals have to take their
time
to rush their
work
and earn money for their living income.
For instance
, in Vietnam, many students who live far from home have to study and
work
in
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the same
time
.
In addition
, some of them have to
work
during their holidays to have more money so
that
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they do not have enough
time
to visit their father and mother. The
second
reason is that nowadays, people who get married tend to live far from their
parents
and start their own life. Because of taking most of
the
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time
with their
work
, feeding their child and
family
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problems, they do not care too much about their
parents
. There are various effects if
this
situation just
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to repeat. The main impact is that the relationship between the daughter or the son and
parents
become
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worse. Long
time
no meeting and no interaction, most people will change their
mind
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and become different even forget each other.
For example
, there are many situations that the
parents
lost their
child
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contacts
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with no footsteps in many countries.  In conclusion, there are various reasons
relate
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to
this
problem.
In addition
,
this
problem should be improved in many ways.
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  • predominant
  • commitments
  • imbalance
  • digital technology
  • social media
  • globalization
  • weakened
  • disconnected
  • strain
  • stress
  • mental health issues
  • developmental issues
  • behavioral problems
  • parental guidance
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