Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other type of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
A majority of
countries
Change noun form
countries'
country's
Correct your spelling
governments
government
goverments
believe that economical Correct your spelling
governments
progresses
are most important. Change the wording
progress
signs of progress
Linking Words
However
some individuals suppose that other Add a comma
,However
progresses
Change the verb form
progress
Add a missing verb
is not
not
less important than Correct your spelling
no
previous
. In my opinion, Replace the word
previously
economical
progress of a country may be a foundation for other Correct article usage
the economical
areas
.
On the one hand, positive economic results of each Use synonyms
countries
may Change to a singular noun
country
effect
Correct your spelling
affect
to
all Change preposition
apply
areas
, Use synonyms
such
as education, medicine, Linking Words
developing
Replace the word
development
new
technologies e.t.c, Change preposition
of new
Linking Words
consequently
they will be on a high level, and I agree. High economic resources of a country give opportunities to young Add a comma
,consequently
people
Use synonyms
study
for freeFix the infinitive
to study
,
because their Remove the comma
apply
Correct your spelling
government
goverment
Correct your spelling
government
invest
Correct subject-verb agreement
invests
to
the national universities. Change preposition
in
For example
, in Canada citizens Linking Words
able
to study without paying for education, Add a missing verb
are able
furtheremore
they can get extra courses to get Correct your spelling
furthermore
academic
Add an article
an academic
degree
.
On Fix the agreement mistake
degrees
the
Remove the article
apply
another
hand, success results in other Correct quantifier usage
other
areas
can bring Use synonyms
people
being more healthy, especially nowadays, when Use synonyms
people
lead Use synonyms
non-active
Correct article usage
a non-active
Correct your spelling
lifestyle
life style
. Correct your spelling
lifestyle
For instance
, if Linking Words
country
Correct article usage
a country
develop
different sports and send young Change the verb form
develops
people
to various championships, it would force persons Use synonyms
observe
Add the particle
to observe
this
type of Linking Words
arranges
and Replace the word
arrangement
Correct your spelling
support
supprt
their Correct your spelling
support
sport
leaders, Change the noun form
sports
consequently
Linking Words
spend
more time in sport Wrong verb form
spending
areas
. For that Use synonyms
people
will not gain some different illnesses and they can save their budget to not spend it Use synonyms
for
any drugs
To summarise, other Change preposition
on
progresses
Change the wording
progress
signs of progress
such
as sport, Linking Words
medicine
, are Correct word choice
and medicine
significant
important. Change the adjective
significantly
However
, Linking Words
economic
should be Replace the word
economics
at
Change preposition
in
Linking Words
first
place because other results depend on it.Correct article usage
the first
Submitted by ruslanalmukhanov on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.