Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other type of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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governments
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governments
believe that economical
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progress
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are most important.
However
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some individuals suppose that other
progresses
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not
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less important than
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. In my opinion,
economical
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the economical
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progress of a country may be a foundation for other
areas
. On the one hand, positive economic results of each
countries
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may
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to
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all
areas
,
such
as education, medicine,
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new
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technologies e.t.c,
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they will be on a high level, and I agree. High economic resources of a country give opportunities to young
people
study
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for free
,
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because their
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government
goverment
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invest
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to
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the national universities.
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, in Canada citizens
able
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to study without paying for education,
furtheremore
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furthermore
they can get extra courses to get
academic
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degree
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. On
the
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another
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hand, success results in other
areas
can bring
people
being more healthy, especially nowadays, when
people
lead
non-active
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lifestyle
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life style
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.
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, if
country
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a country
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develop
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different sports and send young
people
to various championships, it would force persons
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this
type of
arranges
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and
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support
supprt
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support
their
sport
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leaders,
consequently
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more time in sport
areas
. For that
people
will not gain some different illnesses and they can save their budget to not spend it
for
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any drugs To summarise, other
progresses
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progress
signs of progress
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such
as sport,
medicine
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and medicine
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, are
significant
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important.
However
,
economic
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should be
at
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first
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place because other results depend on it.
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