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Some people think parents should not encourage children to do part-time jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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In contemporary society, working plays a vital role in our lives. Some people believe that
parents
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 ought to treat
children
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 in order to take part in summer
jobs
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 while they are off to school.
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, some other people uphold the view that
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 had better not motivate
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 to participate in a part-time job. Unequivocally, providing that
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 send their
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 to work, they may have more socialized and well-rounded kids. From where I stand, I could not agree more with the notion of part-time
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 for
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.
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, there is a common belief that adolescents would rather spend their summer hanging out with friends, wander, and dawdle along by throwing parties. Seeing in
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 light, in order to teach
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 how to become more acquainted with entrepreneurship, we had better actively encourage
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 for part-time
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. To recapitulate briefly, bringing
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 issue to light and putting the mentioned theory to practice, we ought to establish some
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 specifically for youngsters and teenagers. They can be trained and educated to become more enthusiastic about part-time
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. If
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 sign up their
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 in these kinds of
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, they turn on the power button of creativity and collaboration in their kids’ minds.
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 fact will not come true unless
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 try their bests for applauding
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 to hit the road of taking part in a part-time job and entering the world of profession.
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