Some people argue that capital punishment is good for a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

One proverbial expression says, “An eye for an eye, a tooth for a tooth” which means that the
punishment
should always be
as
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same degree as the committed
crime
. Whilst some
people
view
this
as beneficial for a
country
, others see it as injustice and inhumane.
In
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my own perspective, I totally agree with
death
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penalty
and the following paragraphs will support my views on the said matter. Nowadays,
crime
rates
are continue
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to increase because of poverty and
food
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crisis
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. As observed, murders, rape and other serious crimes are
also
happening more often now than ever. With capital
punishment
in place, it helps to reduce
crime
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rate as
people
get to be aware of the possible consequences of their actions which is
death
. Back when
Philippines
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the Philippines
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had
death
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penalty
,
people
feared lethal injection and “
silia
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silica
cilia
electria
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electric
” (electric chair).
As a result
,
crime
rates
were lower
before
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compared
today
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to today
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. Now, after banning the use of capital
punishment
because of the involvement of the Catholic church, criminals use it as an advantage to do heinous crimes repeatedly as they are aware that they can only get jail time as a consequence. Unfortunately,
instead
of criminals fearing for their lives now, it is the common
people
that are scared knowing that their lives are in great danger.
Additionally
, imposing
death
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penalty
is beneficial for the progress of one’s
country
. It does not only make
people
discipline
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but
also
make
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the
country
safer to live in. Like Singapore, it is considered
as
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one of the
most
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safest
country
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that is
why
people
from all over the world come and pay
visit
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. But why do you think it is safe? It is because of their capital
punishment
.
As a result
,
crime
rates
are low compared to
its
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other neighbouring countries. Local residents as well as tourists get to travel around the
country
without fearing for their lives as well as their possessions. In conclusion, I believe that part of a
country
’s success and greatness is
also
making sure that it is safe to live in and has low
crime
rates
. By imposing
death
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penalty
, it does not only eliminate criminals but
also
making
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makes
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people
safe.
Thus
, I totally agree with capital
punishment
.
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