Some people argue that capital punishment is good for a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

#people #punishment #country

One proverbial expression says, “An eye for an eye, a tooth for a tooth” which means that the

punishment

should always be

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same degree as the committed

crime

. Whilst some

people

view

this

as beneficial for a

country

, others see it as injustice and inhumane.

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my own perspective, I totally agree with

death

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the death

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penalty

and the following paragraphs will support my views on the said matter. Nowadays,

crime

rates

are continue

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to increase because of poverty and

food

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the food

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crisis

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. As observed, murders, rape and other serious crimes are

also

happening more often now than ever. With capital

punishment

in place, it helps to reduce

crime

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rate as

people

get to be aware of the possible consequences of their actions which is

death

. Back when

Philippines

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the Philippines

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had

death

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the death

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penalty

people

feared lethal injection and “

silia

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silica

cilia

electria

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electric

” (electric chair).

As a result

crime

rates

were lower

before

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apply

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compared

today

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. Now, after banning the use of capital

punishment

because of the involvement of the Catholic church, criminals use it as an advantage to do heinous crimes repeatedly as they are aware that they can only get jail time as a consequence. Unfortunately,

instead

of criminals fearing for their lives now, it is the common

people

that are scared knowing that their lives are in great danger.

Additionally

, imposing

death

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penalty

is beneficial for the progress of one’s

country

. It does not only make

people

discipline

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but

also

make

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makes

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the

country

safer to live in. Like Singapore, it is considered

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one of the

most

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safest

country

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countries

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that is

why

people

from all over the world come and pay

visit

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. But why do you think it is safe? It is because of their capital

punishment

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crime

rates

are low compared to

its

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other neighbouring countries. Local residents as well as tourists get to travel around the

country

without fearing for their lives as well as their possessions. In conclusion, I believe that part of a

country

’s success and greatness is

also

making sure that it is safe to live in and has low

crime

rates

. By imposing

death

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the death

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penalty

, it does not only eliminate criminals but

also

making

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makes

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people

safe.

Thus

, I totally agree with capital

punishment

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