Some people argue that capital punishment is good for a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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One proverbial expression says, “An eye for an eye, a tooth for a tooth” which means that the

punishment

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should always be

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same degree as the committed

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. Whilst some

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view

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as beneficial for a

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, others see it as injustice and inhumane.

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my own perspective, I totally agree with

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death

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the death

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penalty

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and the following paragraphs will support my views on the said matter. Nowadays,

crime

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rates

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are continue

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to increase because of poverty and

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crisis

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. As observed, murders, rape and other serious crimes are

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happening more often now than ever. With capital

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in place, it helps to reduce

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crime

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rate as

people

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get to be aware of the possible consequences of their actions which is

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. Back when

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the Philippines

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had

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death

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penalty

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people

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feared lethal injection and “

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silica

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electria

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electric

” (electric chair).

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crime

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rates

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were lower

before

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compared

today

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. Now, after banning the use of capital

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because of the involvement of the Catholic church, criminals use it as an advantage to do heinous crimes repeatedly as they are aware that they can only get jail time as a consequence. Unfortunately,

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of criminals fearing for their lives now, it is the common

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that are scared knowing that their lives are in great danger.

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, imposing

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death

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the death

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penalty

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is beneficial for the progress of one’s

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. It does not only make

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discipline

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but

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make

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makes

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the

country

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safer to live in. Like Singapore, it is considered

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one of the

most

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safest

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country

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that is

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why

people

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from all over the world come and pay

visit

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. But why do you think it is safe? It is because of their capital

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crime

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rates

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are low compared to

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other neighbouring countries. Local residents as well as tourists get to travel around the

country

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without fearing for their lives as well as their possessions. In conclusion, I believe that part of a

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’s success and greatness is

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making sure that it is safe to live in and has low

crime

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rates

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. By imposing

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death

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the death

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penalty

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, it does not only eliminate criminals but

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making

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people

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safe.

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, I totally agree with capital

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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