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Some people beleive that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In today's era,
choices
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 are a debatable issue everywhere and everyone has a different choice. I completely believe that
people
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 should have too many
choices
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 so that they can get at least
one
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 of them. I will describe why
people
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 have too many
choices
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 in detail.
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 of all, if
people
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 hope to get only
one
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 thing
then
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 more possibility of not getting desired things because of insufficient product.
Besides
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, any kind of product or things to get difficult cause more
people
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 than the product.
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, if
students
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 want to get admission and choice only
one
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 university to admit there,
then
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 the maximum number of
students
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 will not admit because of limited seats. Only a few
students
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 can get admission. So I think that
students
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 should have too many
choices
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 of universities and they can get admission to anyone from more
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 universities.
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, some
people
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 can think of any kind of online purchase and they can buy products from any
one
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 website which they like.
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, approximately twenty years ago we had no idea how the mobile phone connects to the internet, but now many cell phones are being produced daily and most
people
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 know how to enter the internet. In conclusion, I believe that
choices
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 and opportunities are growing rapidly
therefore
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 we should make an effort to utilize them wisely.
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