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Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports starts) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There are groups of
people
 who believe that celebrities have too much income.I do think that
although
 their earnings are much higher than others, they deserve it,and in the following essay I will give my point of view about that, and
also
 I would say that which group of the public should be paid as much as the famous public.
Firstly
 famous
people
 are divested from private lives. they are forced to display everything in their personal lives
such
 as their lifestyle and their relationships.they should be perfect in any prospects
such
 as style, being a role model, behaviour and so on.
thus
 I think they are under so much pressure to be perfect by the press and community, And maybe money can make it to them.
Secondly
, artists and sports stars are unique in their own kind. they are producing and generating some content
that is
 fascinating and outstanding and no one can be replaced by them.
for example
, everybody knows that there always be only one Michael Jackson and he is
second
 to none or the other example is Maradona he is a legend not only in South America but in the world.
Although
 these group of
people
 earn so much money ,in my opinion, medical staff
such
 as doctors and nurses should be paid more than
this
 because their career is very arduous and sensitive and they are prone to many viruses in bacteria and their working environment is not very happy and
people
 are in the pain .
thus
 they are subject to mental diseases
such
 as depression and anxiety. To sum up, despite the fact there are some
people
 Protesting celebrities' incomes, there are other groups who argue that they are different from other humankind.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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