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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#country #language
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think
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 about
problems
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the problems
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 of living in a foreign
country
 that you have to speak
to
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a new language? It is obvious that it may
cause
 a lot of practical and
also
 social
problems
. In
this
essay
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 I would mention
important
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the important
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 social
problems
 of living in a foreign
country
.
First
 of all, it would
cause
 psychological
problems
. As well as we could not speak or understand people of that area,
then
 it is clear that we could not find friends. As we do not have any
friend
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, we never have the chance of sharing experiences with one
, not
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another, not
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 having
chance
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 to take part in parties and does not have anyone to understand and listen to us when we are in a bad situation, in one word makes us isolated. Social exclusion in long term can
cause
 depression. Apart from that, working in a
country
 with
strange
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a strange
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 language can affect
on
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our
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employment
employement
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employment
 situation. Could not understand the tasks clearly,
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 us as an inefficient
employee
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employees
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. The more misunderstanding, the worse the situation becomes and
finally
 that can
cause
a
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lay off
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. After that, financial
problems
 will
be
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occurred
cured
occured
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occur
. In conclusion, it was agreed that to live in a foreign
country
, fluency
of
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 their language is a significant need which may
cause
 many
problems
such
 as psychological and financial if not fulfilled.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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