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In a number of countries, some people think it’s necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

#countries #people #it’s #sums #money #railway #lines #trains #cities #transport
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true that citizens have different views about spending money
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 a
country
. Others think that it’s essential to invest significant amounts of financial support for building new railroads for trains between cities.
Conversely
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 other people hold the notion government
need
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 to promote the system improvement of existing public transport. On the one
hand
, building new railroads bring along not only benefits but
also
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. As for the benefits, there
are
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 2 factors worth
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 including
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, time-saving and less traffic.
Firstly
, if
country
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have
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more new railway lines we would come to more local in our
country
 and don’t need to use
many
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 money for
come
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 address you want because we maybe will have a road that leads directly to that place.
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 we won’t need
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many
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 time
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, there will
be have
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 many trains for us to choose
.
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Last
 but not least, we would sure save
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time and can go home
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in
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correct
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 time because of
country
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 had
have
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 many railroads so the traffic jams will
be solve
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. Regarding the drawback,
country
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the country
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 may need
re-planning
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 street system for building train stations and
place
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 to put train tracks.
In addition
taking
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 up space to build, citizens
also
 have to spend a lot of for
this
 new construction.
On the other
hand
, better
improving
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of
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existing public transport vehicles offers different pros and cons. When it comes to the advantages, dill (thì là) people still keep they are old transport and
its
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 less economical than we
choose
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new
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 one. But
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disadvantages
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 of
this
 is if we do like
this
 we just improve and reuse ( sử dụng) the old ones, we
are not update
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a modern transports
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 for
country
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 so that the
country
 will not keep up (
theo
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the
 kịp) with the globalization of the world. A relevant illustration of
this
 would be that in the world we are using
electric
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 for
transports
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transport
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 now but in your
country
 still use cars,
bus
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 and
the
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trains that
consuming
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 too much fuel it’s really not good. Personality,
i
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 agree with another option that both measures should go
hand
 in
hand
. All in
all
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 transition is very crucial for a
country
 because
its
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 will promote travel increase and help
economy
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 develop. But if we only focus on the new aspects, we are overlooking the fundamental
basic
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 of a
country
. What actually matters is that the government private
sectors
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sector
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 and
individual
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individuals
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 should have
positive
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 attitude to ward different promising innovation methods and willing to start the projects if they are equivalent.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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