In a number of countries, some people think it’s necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

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. Others think that it’s essential to invest significant amounts of financial support for building new railroads for trains between cities.
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other people hold the notion government
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to promote the system improvement of existing public transport. On the one
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, building new railroads bring along not only benefits but
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, time-saving and less traffic.
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more new railway lines we would come to more local in our
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address you want because we maybe will have a road that leads directly to that place.
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many trains for us to choose
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many railroads so the traffic jams will
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. Regarding the drawback,
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may need
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street system for building train stations and
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to put train tracks.
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up space to build, citizens
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have to spend a lot of for
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new construction.
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existing public transport vehicles offers different pros and cons. When it comes to the advantages, dill (thì là) people still keep they are old transport and
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less economical than we
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of
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we just improve and reuse ( sử dụng) the old ones, we
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a modern transports
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so that the
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will not keep up (
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now but in your
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still use cars,
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trains that
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too much fuel it’s really not good. Personality,
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agree with another option that both measures should go
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transition is very crucial for a
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will promote travel increase and help
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develop. But if we only focus on the new aspects, we are overlooking the fundamental
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of a
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. What actually matters is that the government private
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should have
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attitude to ward different promising innovation methods and willing to start the projects if they are equivalent.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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