‏In many countries, schoolchildren are required to wear school uniforms. ‏Do you think this should this be enforced in all schools?

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in many parts of the world ,students are

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being

obligated to wear uniforms.I stand strongly by

this

inforcment

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enforcement

and

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believe it should be applied to all institutes.and

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firstly

, wearing the same uniforms give a sense of

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discipline

dicipline

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discipline

and part of dress coding .

in other words

,it will give children a feeling of

belongnisness

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belongingness

to that particular

school

.and it will

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automatically

automaticly

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automatically

make them behave better when

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the

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they

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go out after

school

hours

for instance

.because they know that their attitude

represnt

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represent

their institute .

secondly

,not all schoolchildren live in the same social status .and not all of them can afford

luxurios

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luxurious

luxuries

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clothes

clouses

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clauses

closes

,so enforcing

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outfets

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outfits

for all is good for their unity and allows for less

discremination

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discrimination

such

that

student

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students

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be judged based on their performance not their look .my only recommendation

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that

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outfets

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outfits

should be in a more

cheerable

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steerable

calors

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colours

then

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the ones we are seeing them around.

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finally

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Finally

this

also

beneficial for the

school

personeel

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personnel

,it

provide

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free

puplicity

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publicity

for example

if they went on a trip

then

everyone around them will know which

school

they are a part of . to

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conclude

, wearing uniforms should be the

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of all teaching institutes if they are reaching for a more

diciplment

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devilment

and unity .

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