Some feel governments, rather than private companies, should be in charge of medical services. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There are debates about whether
health
services
should be provided by governments
or private sectors. In my opinion
getting a Add a comma
,opinion
health
service is a basic human right, so I strongly support the idea that public health
service
should be available for everyone. In Fix the agreement mistake
services
this
essay
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,essay
i
will discuss both ideas to make a conclusion.
Nowadays capitalistic system let private companies stand a big role in every industry, Change the capitalization
I
therefore
one of the main industry
is Fix the agreement mistake
industries
medical
sector. Of Add an article
the medical
course
it creates Add a comma
,course
a
competition, Remove the article
apply
a
quicker development, Correct article usage
apply
better
Correct word choice
and better
services
. Public hospitals are mostly too crowded and busy and often can not offer instant service. For example
, in Mongolia
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,Mongolia
i
have to reserve a Change the capitalization
I
doctor
appointment at least one month Change noun form
doctor's
a
prior and sometimes it can cause Correct article usage
apply
a
fraud in Remove the article
apply
this
situation. However
the essential feature of capitalism is the motive to make profit
, Add an article
a profit
hence
we should carefully consider whether our people`s health
should be relying
on profit.
Administrations of every country Wrong verb form
rely
is
responsible for their people`s safety, Change the verb form
are
health
and well being
. Add a hyphen
well-being
Governments
run their own medical systems, people will have equal opportunities to receive medical services
regardless of their financial status. To be more specific, there are some cases, that
after private companies took over medical Correct word choice
apply
services
from governments
, the price for services
such
as general checkups and surgeries have
increased significantly. Correct subject-verb agreement
has
Consequently
, it has become burdensome for people to go to the hospital because of its cost.
In conclusion, medical services
are far better to be run by governments
for several reasons. Governments
can offer equal chances for people to get medical services
without discrimination of both wealth and region. In addition
to that, private insurance will be an option not compulsory in order to receive medical services
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