Some feel governments, rather than private companies, should be in charge of medical services. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are debates about whether

health

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services

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should be provided by

governments

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or private sectors. In my

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getting a

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service is a basic human right, so I strongly support the idea that public

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service

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should be available for everyone. In

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essay

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will discuss both ideas to make a conclusion. Nowadays capitalistic system let private companies stand a big role in every industry,

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one of the main

industry

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medical

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the medical

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sector. Of

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it creates

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apply

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competition,

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quicker development,

better

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and better

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services

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. Public hospitals are mostly too crowded and busy and often can not offer instant service.

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, in

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have to reserve a

doctor

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appointment at least one month

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prior and sometimes it can cause

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fraud in

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situation.

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the essential feature of capitalism is the motive to make

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a profit

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we should carefully consider whether our people`s

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should be

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on profit. Administrations of every country

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responsible for their people`s safety,

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and

well being

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Governments

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run their own medical systems, people will have equal opportunities to receive medical

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regardless of their financial status. To be more specific, there are some cases,

that

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after private companies took over medical

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from

governments

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, the price for

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such

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as general checkups and surgeries

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increased significantly.

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, it has become burdensome for people to go to the hospital because of its cost. In conclusion, medical

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are far better to be run by

governments

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for several reasons.

Governments

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can offer equal chances for people to get medical

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without discrimination of both wealth and region.

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to that, private insurance will be an option not compulsory in order to receive medical

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

fundamental human right
equitable access
government-run healthcare
economies of scale
negotiate
healthcare costs
profit motives
compromised healthcare
health inequities
accountable
public health objectives
reinvest
infrastructure

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