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Some people believe academic success depends mostly on having a good teacher.others argue that is is the attitude of the student that matters most.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Although
 it is sometimes thought that successfully academic achievement belongs to having a good tutor, some people think that it relies on student
attitution
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attribution
. In my opinion,
students
 ought to rely only on themselves. Because getting knowledge needs more
time
 after university
time
. Getting knowledge from an experienced teacher is extremely vital for
students
, who desire to obtain academic results.
In other words
, teachers should be capable to explain different difficult topics to
students
 through simple explanations.
Furthermore
, the process of transferring knowledge needs to be more fascinating.
For example
, there are plenty of technological tools, which assist to display information by virtualising some information on a display.
However
, if
students
 do not have enough motivation to succeed it can be so effective. Another point to consider is that self-studying is a key role to acquire academic success. Nowadays, we live in a developed digitalized world, where people have a lot of opportunities
such
 as wasting
time
 by surfing the web.
Consequently
, they do not have more
time
 for learning new skills and technologies and rely only on university studies.
As a
result
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 a big part of
students
are
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is
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 not able to achieve to desired results in universities. They should emphasise their studying and excel in their
time
 management, which is crucial. Overall, while a certain category of people believes that academic success is on a good tutor, I think that
students
 ought to pay attention to their self-studying because getting and processing new information need more
time
.
Students
 should improve their
time
 managementmagement skills.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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