''prevention is better than cure''. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extend do you agree?

Always prevention is better than cure. Prevention helps us to protect
disorders
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against disorders
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and
diseases
. Researching and treating
diseases
is
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also
preventative measures to avoid major things.
Firstly
, Avoid things that damage your
health
. Eat healthy foods. Safely is better than any precaution. Avoid Junk and unhealthy foods like street burgers, pizza, pasta etc. Eat fruits and vegetables. and I agree Prevention is better than cure.
On the other hand
,
Health
is not maintain
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properly and you feel there is some problem
on
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in
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your body or mind, should
imediate
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immediate
immediately
go to
doctor
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the doctor
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, Doctor will research and treat
diseases
otherwise
it will go worse. Later
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stage will come when there is no way to
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research
reasearch
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research
and
treating
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diseases
so if we find any disorder in
health
, we should
imediate
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immediate
dignose
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diagnose
and treat our
diseases
otherwise
we can't find any way.
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, Always
priorty
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priority
our
health
. There is nothing
important
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more important
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than our
health
. If we have
health
we can do anything in our life, No
health
means No life. So always avoid foods or things that damage your
health
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proactive
  • preventive measures
  • lifestyle diseases
  • public health
  • healthcare expenditure
  • cost-effective
  • chronic conditions
  • early detection
  • immunization
  • health promotion
  • risk factors
  • non-communicable diseases
  • disease surveillance
  • preventive diagnostics
  • health literacy
  • universal healthcare
  • primary prevention
  • secondary prevention
  • tertiary prevention
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