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People should read only those books that are about real events, real people and established fact

It is a commonly held belief that
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based on realism
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 more useful.
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 people have to read just realistic
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 of miracle
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, even though miraculous
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 are fantastic, I would not support that everyone,
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, children read these
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 which were written according to real events, because some realistic
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 as criminal, political or historical create some negative effects
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 as trauma and the information of a correct personality. One reason why children should not read those
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 which are based on real events is that
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trauma for them. For ,instance some negative factors
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 as war, suicides or betrayal of a friend which are noted in historical and dramatic
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 may be role models for little readers. In
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 self-doubt
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 and distrust of others will create and adaptation to society will be suffered.
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, bad characters' roles based on a real-life can have a negative effect on the formation of a child's personality. According to a psychology experiment conducted on kindergarten
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 who
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 taken to the zoo, offspring do not apply or repeat what was said
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 but fulfil what they have seen and discovered by themselves.
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 if they would read about suicide or criminal event in the book, they will try it unknowingly, because of cannot realize what occurred. As a consequence, in the
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future these all will create some issues for both either themselves
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 society since it is not properly formed as a correct character. In conclusion, I would maintain that even though some
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people have thoughts about just real events
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 are read, I would support miracle and fantasy
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 for offspring, because of some negative effects psychology affects and
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, I would be able to recommend that parents must choose report for their scion according to kids' age and psychology

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