Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people’s behaviour.

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A group of
people
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think that addiction to
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games
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and television has bad effects while others opinion it has no marginal influence on individuals' behaviour. In my opinion, violence in TV shows and
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games
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has more drawbacks than giving a positive effect on
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’s behaviour.
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,
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who play
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games
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or watch TV show
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a lot become more introverted and want to stay lonely due to the fact that most
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games
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are played individually.
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, they end up being shy to talk in front of a big audience, or usually avoid giving a speech on
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occasions. Most of the time
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who are addicted to
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games
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do not want to make friends and do not like hanging out with them.
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, they act sharply or unexpectedly, because they often think they are playing the game and feel living in an abstract world.
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,
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usually watch the television at home and play
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indoors.
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, their physical health
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will be damaged.
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, others play outdoor
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in a team
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as
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, basketball or volleyball improving their physical activity, whereas the person who plays
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games
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sits in front of the
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for a long time degrading his movements and physical activities mostly being alone. It
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has a negative effect on their sleep regime. To conclude, an addiction to TV shows and
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games
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has damage on person’s behaviour as well as our society than giving a positive effect on their actions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aggressive behavior
  • Desensitization
  • Normalization
  • Psychological impact
  • Fear and anxiety
  • Parental control
  • Moderating
  • Fictional vs. real-world violence
  • Counterarguments
  • Correlation
  • Environmental influences
  • Social messages
  • Stress relief
  • Safe outlet
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