The two pie charts provide information about boys and girls’ participation rates in various activities after the survey.
The two pie charts provide information about
boys
and girls’ participation rates in various Change noun form
boys'
boy's
activities
after the survey.
Overall
, computer games are the most famous activity among boys
, whereas
dancing is among girls. Males’ least participating activity is reading. In contrast
, it takes the second highest portion
among females.
Boys
mostly like to play computer games, as a result
of the survey, it
shows almost half of all cultural and leisure Correct pronoun usage
apply
activities
, whereas
girls’ portion
in this
activity takes nearly half of boys’
rate, 16%. The second highest participation Add an article
the boys’
portion
among boys
is basketball which takes nearly a quarter of all activities
. Similarly
, girls involve in reading after the
dancing, Correct article usage
apply
shows
21%.
The Correct subject-verb agreement
show
least
Correct your spelling
last
portion
in
cultural and leisure Change preposition
of
activities
is reading that boys
participate in, 2%. The rate of 11%, which shows a similar participation portion
indicates skateboarding for boys
and gymnastics for girls. Both males and females listen to the music in
the same level, taking one-tenth of all Change preposition
at
activities
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