It is a natural process for animal spaces to become extinct. There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Many people claim that animal species
become
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extinct, it is a natural occurrence. No one
try
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to prevent
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from happening. It is my understanding that it will be harmful up to
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extend
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but would be beneficial under some circumstances. I will explicate some logical
reason
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to support my point of view. Commence with views of disagreement, it is observed that many
of
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the
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animals
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species become vanished is due to
negligence
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the negligence
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of human beings. Like dinosaurs was completely finished because of the volcanic eruptions that
goes
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climate change and these change may occur due to the heat increase on
earth
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the earth
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. In a survey conducted by
forest
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the forest
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department
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it was found that
,
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in
future
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many
of
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other animal types become lost because of the increase in
temperature
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the temperature
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of Earth.
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,
butterfly
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the butterfly
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is
completed
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dead due to the increase of chlorofluorocarbon gas which is produced by air conditioner and refrigerators.
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to WhatsApp you
of
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are of
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agreement some
individual
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individuals
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believe that it is a natural process for animal types
become
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to become
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extinct because
in
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,in
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ancient
time
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times
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, there was no device which heat can produce. Even that time when you of animal kinds was finished.
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, people should try to prevent
this
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from happening like they do not hunt
the
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apply
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animal. Because of hunting many
animals
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become vanished and do not cut trees because trees are
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the house
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house
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houses
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of many
animals
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. So they have to preserve the animal species. To conclude
this
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, I agree with the given statement because
food
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the food
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chain
is
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also happens
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also
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happened in the
world wide
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worldwide
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forest. So, many
of
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apply
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animals
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become extinct after
sometime
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. That's why it's a natural process.
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