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Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is argued whether
parents
 whose
children
 attend private
schools
 should pay taxes to support public
schools
. I personally think they ought to because it does not only guarantee a bright future for the country’s economy
,
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 but
also
 eases many people’s lives.
First
, it is difficult to create a new system of tax-paying for
parents
 with
children
 who study at private
schools
. It means the government would need a base of families which constantly should be updated.
This
 would be unnecessary pressure on the government.
Moreover
,
parents
 would be required to submit written proof letters on a regular basis which would prove that their
children
 truly attend private
schools
. All of these factors make the lives of
parents
 and the government more difficult.
Second
, taxes are an investment to ensure the economic growth of the country. It is no secret that the majority of
children
 study at public
schools
. If a new system was introduced, the
schools
 would have less budget which would lower the quality of education.
As a result
, these
children
 would be underqualified when they are grown up.
This
, in turn, leads to economic recession.
Hence
, every parent should be happy to invest in the future of the country. In conclusion, I disagree that taxes for public education should differ among
parents
 depending on the school type their
children
 attend.
This
 would bring more work and influence the future of the country.
Instead
, all
parents
 should support public
schools
 which most of the
children
 attend.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tax exemption
  • public education
  • private schools
  • collective responsibility
  • societal welfare
  • equitable access
  • financial burden
  • social cohesion
  • tax credits
  • vouchers
  • subsidies
  • state-funded
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • public vs. private sector
  • quality of education
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