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In many countries today, the eating habits and lifestyles of children are different from those of previous generations. Some people say this has had a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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 multiple decades, the way of living and the food consumption of children have considerably changed compared to the previous years. The general public
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 that the current lifestyle of young people will have an impact
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 their health. While some people think that, the present healthcare service in our society is so much advanced that it can prevent any disease from the new habits of
youngsters
. Each side
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 valid reasons to support their arguments,
however
, I strongly believe that overall
children
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 lifestyles affect their physical metabolism.
To begin
 with, the different nutritional disease
rate
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 in underage
individual
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 have dramatically soared throughout several years. These illnesses
such
 as obesity, diabetes or
also
 eating
disorder
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 are becoming more common among
youngsters
. It is especially due to the way they feed themselves with junk food. The wrong nutritional
behavior
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 of
youngsters
 can be a large issue for them in their following life because at their age range it is the time where their body
strengthen
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 for all their life.
In addition
 to that, the physical activity of children is significantly lower than in the past.
This
 issue is probably due to the advent of indoor leisure
such
 as video games. Currently, underage people
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 to spend their spare time behind a screen rather
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a
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sporting activity,
this
 fact affects considerably their health.
Thus
,
youngsters
 lead undoubtedly a lifestyle of unhealthy habits. They need to change their way of life
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 a better diet with a large variety of authentic food to get proper
nutrient
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nutrients
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such
 as vitamins and fibres.
Besides
, they should do daily exercise and an active routine with some sporting activities.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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