Some people believe that men and women are equal and so women should be able to do any job they want. Others feel men and women are not equal and therefore there are certain jobs which are not suitable for women. What is your opinion?

Most
of
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people
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the people
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thinks
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that
women
and
men
are
same
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rights. They are able to do any kind of job that they want.
However
, others assume that
men
and
women
are not
same
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the same
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that
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is why there are certain jobs that
women
can't do it On one hand, many
people
believe that
men
and
women
have the same rights. In society, they
are treat
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equally. They can participate in all
kind
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kinds
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of
field
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fields
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that they want
for example
doctor
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doctors
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,
nurse
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nurses
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,
farmer
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farmers
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, labour, engineer etc.
Women
have
same
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power as
men
. They don't have any difference.
On the other hand
, Few
people
feel that
men
and
women
are different. There are certain professions
that
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only
men
can participate.
Women
are not able to take part in all kinds of jobs because they don't have
ability
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the ability
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.
Women
are weak as
compare
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to
men
and they can join in all kinds of
field
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fields
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. In conclusion, all human beings have
same
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rights. They have
same
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energy and strength. They can join in any work that they want. In
society
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people
should treat all human beings equally. There
are
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no
difference
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differences
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between them.
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