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some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #reason #language #travel #work #country #someone
yes, it is necessary to understand a
language
 whenever you are
travel
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travelling
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 or
work
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working
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 in
foreign
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a foreign
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country
.
Language
 is the best way to understand the personality
of
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the
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of that
country
. If you
donot
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do not
don't
 know the
language
 of
the
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that’s
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that
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 particular
country
then
 you should not communicate with those people. People in
the
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foreign
country
are usually go
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are usually going
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 for the working and they
donot
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do not
don't
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about
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the
language
 of that
country
 creating an issue in communication resulting
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lack
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a lack
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 of commitment which causes
of
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apply
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a lot of problems. So to understand a
language
 whenever you are moving in a
country
 is more
essentials
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. We understand it with an example
,
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apply
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 if any student
want
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wants
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 to study in
the
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a
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 foreign
country
 like Australia. The requirement of
that’s
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that
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country
 is to understand
English
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the English
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language
. So if someone
donot
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do not
don't
 know about
that’s
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that
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particular
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a particular
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language
then
 they will face a lot of
problem
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problems
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. So the
official
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office
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 of
the
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apply
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Australia
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do not
don't
donot
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do not
 allow those students. So it is necessary to understand a
language
 whenever you are moving
into
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to
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foreign
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a foreign
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country
. So when you understand a particular
language
then
 there will increase a lot of benefits in terms
communication
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, commitment and understanding
the
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of the
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peoples
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people
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 of
the
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apply
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that’s
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that
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country
. While it is
also
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beneficial
beneficials
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beneficial
 to understand the lifestyle of
that’s
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that
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country
. Usually,
English
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the English
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language
 is considered
as
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a
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an
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 international
language
. In most
of
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the
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countries,
this
language
 has been mostly
speaking
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spoken
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. So the people which
are mostly travel
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mostly travel
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 or
going
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go
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 to work have a little bit of knowledge about
this
language
 and preferred to understand it.
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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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