Some people say young people should be completely free to choose their future job but others think young people must be more realistic in their choice. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Mrs Monica Kullan Senior Nurse
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University of Marchbank Health
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Hillsdunne Rd Marchbank 30 August 2019 Dear Mrs Kullan Re:
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Jake
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, aged 18 I am writing to introduce
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Jake
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,who is about to start studying at Marchbank University.He presents with
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and with associated depression and anxiety. He requires regular monitoring and special exam arrangements.
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presented with
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and anxiety when he was 13. He was referred to a trichologist and was prescribed steroid cream.
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, his condition has worsened and discontinued the medication. After four years,his condition stabilized with some
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regrowth. In December 2018,
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visited again with the same aforementioned complaints associated with a significant weight
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he was advised to consult the doctor, he opted to try homoeopathic remedies. After two months, he has no progress and reported that he has social issues.
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, a referral to the school counsellor was recommended, but he failed to attend the appointment. Currently,he is extremely anxious and increased
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. He
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worried about exams, transition to university and independent living.
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,his alcohol intake has increased to 28 units per week. Your expert observation of
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's condition and special exam arrangements would be extremely beneficial. In case you require any additional information, please do not hesitate to contact me. Yours sincerely Nurse Holly House Blurring School Breckenridge
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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