Young people are often influenced by others in the same age in their behaviour and situations. This is called "peer group pressure". Do the disadvantages outweigh the advantages?

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children
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unhealty
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food and watch TV.
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essay will discuss both sides of the argument and come to a logical conclusion.
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apartment. There are narrow
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and no one enough park for
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children
don'
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whenever go outside
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if a
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to stay at home and watch
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the television
thus
will eat potato or
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are behaving to the press who are
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enterpreneur
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say
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just
that is
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go, don'
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make it. I believe that they are preventing
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want to do so that a boy is feeling blocked himself and there
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result to develop eating disorders
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deal with
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the overweight
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got very alone in the house because family members are working all
time
and
also
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enough
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children
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has got some blockage.
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overweight
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on
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life. One can postulate that
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has to be seen. Whenever we think
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children
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us wondering how the future will be.
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healthy
health
also
the generations be different and
children
can be much more alone in the world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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