Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many individuals prefer to do
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in the same company throughout their life. While the other believes that if they work for various firms
then
they will have great interest in working.
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and
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I will give my own perspective. To commence with, people spend
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time at one work
then
there is a good scope of promotion.
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, they come to know about the pros and cons of companies and they immediately try to remove any obstacle faced by organizations.
For example
, Multi-National Companies increase the salary of their employees every year who are permanently
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with them.
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, they are familiar with the working of their colleagues and understand them in
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, many human beings are satisfied
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the same duty for long years because they do not want to change their status and
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ready to go
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environment.
On the other hand
, many Homo sapiens keep on changing their occupation when they get
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in salaries.
In addition
to
this
, some changed because of higher positions.
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, many big
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offered
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higher package of experienced
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; they can be benefited from them in long run.As
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different duties they have knowledge at
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level
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.
Thus
, life is to be having many experiences at separate times. To recapitulate, it depends on the thinking of person to person whether they want to change the assignment or not.
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for
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skills as compared to
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who keep on changing their jobs.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stability
  • loyalty
  • seniority
  • job satisfaction
  • rapidly changing job market
  • adapt to
  • work culture
  • career progression
  • network
  • diversity of experience
  • adaptability
  • career aspirations
  • dynamic nature
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