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People attend colleges universities for many different reason.( for example new experience, or career properation) what do you think about attend college or universities.

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Nowadays, numerous colleges and universities are offering various
courses
 for online and offline
courses
. These types of
education
 will help to choose their comfortable study plans.
Although
 educational institutes are helped to achieve careers.
Firstly
, schooling is mandatory for everyone. Graduation is not a piece of cake for everyone. Some pupils cannot afford the cost of higher studies. They will start careers by doing jobs. Maybe after some
time
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 they want to start studying again for promotions in their entities, they will join online classes or distance
education
 systems in
this
 way they can balance work and
education
 like a win-win concept not many difficulties as earlier.
On the other hand
, some persons interested to learn new
courses
 on advanced technologies. Many
people
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arepeople
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 interested to study in abroad universities to get new experiences in
education
 and lifestyle. Some
courses
 are not for career growth like Photography, foreign languages, personality development and yoga. Hardly cannot find jobs in these curriculums. In conclusion, more and more students completing
education
 for career programs and new experiences,
Moreover
 career programs
studies
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 are chosen by the majority of people, ,
Finally
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 students join colleges at their convenience.
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