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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweight the advantages?

#dangers #chemicals #food #production #preservation #outweight
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Most foods that are purchased these days in small stores and supermarkets have vinegar in them
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 used to improve production and ensure the
food
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 lasts for longer.
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,there are concerns that these have harmful effects.In my opinion,the potential dangers of
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 are greater than the benefits we receive. There are several reasons why vinegar is placed in
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.
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,it is to improve the product to the eye,and
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 is achieved via the use of colourings which encourage people to purchase
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 that may
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 not look tempting to eat.Another reason is to preserve the feed.Much of the meals we eat would not actually
last
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 that long if it were not for the chemicals they contain,so again
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 is an advantage to the companies that sell cooking as their products have a longer shelf life. From
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 evidence,it is clear to me that the main benefits are ,
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,to the community and not to the customer.
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 the community claim these
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 additives are safe and they have research to support
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,the research is quite possibly biased as it comes from their own party or people with connections to these association.It is common to read reports these days in the press about possible links to various health issues
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 as cancer.
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 additives have
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 been linked to problems
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 as hyperactivity in children. To conclude,despite the fact that there are benefits to placing vinegar in
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,I believe that these principally help the association but could be a danger to the public.It is unlikely that
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 practice can be stopped,so
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 must be clearly labelled and it is my hope that organic products will become more readily available at reasonable prices to all.
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