Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
There has been discussion revolving around the issue of whether
museums
are a place
where people
get educated or it is an amusing place
to get entertained. I tend to believe that exhibition
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the exhibition
center
should be a Change the spelling
centre
place
of education. In this
essay
I will explain my opinion. The primary factor we need to take into consideration is that Add a comma
essay,
museums
are tourist’s biggest attractionFix the agreement mistake
places
place
. For example
, people
who come to visit any country tend to stop by the museums
to be entertained. It is that because places like this
manage to put exhibitions that are interesting or somehow be
appealing to the customers. Unnecessary verb
apply
Moreover
, it is a perfect place
to entertain children
. For example
, it sparks children
curiosity and Change noun form
children's
get
them to be excited for school. It is for Change the verb form
gets
the
reason that Correct determiner usage
this
museums
are predisposed to have exhibitions that keep children
interested. In contrast
, some others may claim that museums
goal is to educate. To start with, Change noun form
museums'
museum's
children
or adults who are going to museums
learn about different cultures, historical
events and it can develop the perfect mindset for young Correct word choice
and historical
people
which help
Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
to
sympathize or identify with other Correct pronoun usage
them to
people
. Another argument can be made that it allows people
to find their interests in life through authentic demonstrations that are held in museums
. Having considered both views I believe that museums
are beneficial for educational purpose because it helps to find yourself and ne
interests which can lead to expanding your mind and worldview later on in life.Correct your spelling
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
