Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Much debate has sparked whether spending four or more years at

university

to get a

degree

really is better than simply getting a

job

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is commonly believed. In

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I will present both views and give my personal opinion.

Firstly

, working a

job

is cheaper than studying at

university

. With rising study costs, one almost always has to take out a student loan, unlike working a normal

job

.

In contrast

to studying, where a student must be supported by society, a working person creates that value. The fact that too few people choose the latter path is the chief reason why study prices have risen so dramatically in the

last

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. Even after getting a

degree

, a large fraction of graduates

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to find a stable footing in the industry

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their

degree

is for. These young adults must

then

struggle with mounting student loan rates. Rather than start studying with no future plan and solid financial backing, it is far more logical to apply for a

job

instead

.

Secondly

, working provides

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experience

that more and more college students lack. With fiercer and fiercer competition in the

job

market, employers choose from the best candidates. Simply having a

degree

just isn’t enough and having practical

experience

is becoming more and more common. What that means is that attaining a

degree

no longer has

such

a big advantage when compared to attaining no

degree

and working.

Also

, working immediately after finishing school does not mean a person will never get a

degree

. They can always do it later

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after they have gathered the necessary

experience

and have become financially independent. Enrolling and graduating from a college or

university

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is easier as well.

Thus

, working after graduating high school can set you on a path in life, which you can enhance later on, once enough

experience

and savings have been accumulated.

However

, studying at a

university

or college empowers one to achieve higher academic heights. Professor lectures, vast libraries and other academic resources transform a fresh high school graduate into a learned scholar. Some studies have shown that the human brain stops forming at around age 25.

This

is important because every piece of information is internalized far better until

then

. That means that while studying at a later date is possible, it does not have the same impact. To conclude, working at a

job

does not put

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on the economic system, while studying does somewhat. Attaining a bachelor’s or master’s

degree

certainly increases