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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with.

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These days, some groups of
people
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 tend to try new things
such
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 as different kinds of foods and visiting new places
while
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 others prefer to have
a
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regular
choice
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 in their
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life
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. I think both views are correct but it is important how
people
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 balance their lifestyles. Some
people
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 are interested in trying new options. Some factors may affect
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this
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 issue. At
first,
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it depends on human personalities. Extroverted
people
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 like to gain new experiences. They have open-minded characteristics which led to
try
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 different routes.
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, the artist should have
a creative brains
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a creative brain
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 and creativity
are
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 increased
as a result
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 of new experiences.
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, if
people
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 like to accept different ideas are more adjustable. They are pleased to test other options and have a high
life
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 satisfaction with each situation.
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, I have a friend who is so lovely because she
is always agree
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 with other friend's suggestions and never worries about where to go or what to eat.
On the other hand
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, for some
people
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 is too hard to change their
life
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 routes.
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, accepting risks is too hard. They believe if they find a secure way to survive, it is not a wise decision to change them. A wise person should usually decide to go to the known ways.
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,
people
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 who are trying new things, spend a lot of money
instead
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 of choosing the same ones.
This
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 schema is the opposite of a consuming lifestyle.
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, the young generation should be satisfied with their belongings and
do
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not want to pay extra money for new things. In conclusion,
people
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 could choose their ways of living as an open-minded view of the world or want to continue
the
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 same ways without any change. I think wise
people
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 could manage both these views in their
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life
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.
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