Money spent on space exploration is a complete waste. Governments could better spend this money on other things to benefit the nation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With all the troubles in the world today,
money
spent on
space
exploration
is a complete waste. The
money
could be better spent on other things. I
am disagree
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with
this
statement. I think
space
exploration
is
good
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thing. there
is
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many
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much
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informations
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pieces of information
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in
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about
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space
exploration
and
people
should
be interest
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in
space
. Maybe in the
future
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there will
be find
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find
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new planets and maybe with
water
. I read in recently the newspaper
there
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that there
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may be
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maybe
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new
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planet
with
water
and it is not so far away as we can’t maybe travel there in
future
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spaceship.
This
is very
excited
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because maybe there is life on
water
planets.
Also
in the
future
maybe on our
planet
in the
future
there will be not good for living maybe because of global warming there will be too
much
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seas and
ocerans
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oceans
but not
water
for drinking. If we find a new
planet
maybe humans will live on the new
planet
but will need
water
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planet
for life.
On the other
hand
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there
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are
arre
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are
some
people
who say that the
money
could be better spent on other things. Maybe
this
is
also
true there are many poor
people
and poor countries in the world today.
Also
in my
country
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there is
the
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crise economy and there are many
people
with no jobs
space
exploration
is very expensive and costs
much
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apply
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money
I think that some countries
they
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cannot do
the
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space
exploration
they need spend their
money
on their country and help others. It is not
good
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a good
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thing for spending all the
money
on
space
. Some
people
need to eat and homeless
people
is
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are
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problem
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • complete waste
  • benefit the nation
  • technological advancements
  • foster
  • international cooperation
  • inspire
  • engage
  • boost the economy
  • long-term benefits
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