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Welcome to another
day
 full of fun
at
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 our kinder room. As
usual
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 we started our
day
with
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 socialising with our friends and
played
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 many indoor games. Many social conversations could be heard in our room
this
 morning where
children
 were discussing
about
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what they did at home
last
 night, while others were seen negotiating during toys and equipment sharing conversations. After
this
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 we all cleaned our room together and sat together on the carpet in a group. We
then
practiced
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 some dance and did some fun exercises on
children
’s favourite songs.
Children
 clapped and encouraged their friends while they were showing off their dance moves.
This
 made them even more energetic and they performed with full energy. During our creative art
activity
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 we made decorated a blue
ribbon
 using different materials like felt, craft paper, paint, etc.
This
 was done to celebrate
the
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blue
ribbon
day
 and educate
children
 about why
is
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blue
ribbon
day
 celebrated. We had some discussions about
this
 while
children
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 were making their artwork. They used blue felt to make the
ribbon
 feel like a real one which was a very good idea. They were very creative throughout the process and learned together. They were happy to show off their work to their teachers and couldn’t wait to take the photo. We appreciated their work and gave them a sticker in return which made them happier. We were lucky to have 2 outdoor play sessions today where
children
 played with full energy and developed physically. They were chasing the footy ball in two different teams and couldn’t stop playing with it
for
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the whole time. Others were seen playing on the tricycles and took turns and played different games like race, obstacle course, monkey bar climbing, etc. As outdoor play is their favourite part of the
day
 so
children
 didn’t want to come back indoors for
the
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lunch time
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. So we decided to play for 10 more mins after which
children
 got very hungry which made them come inside for some food.
Then
 we had lots of food together and had
good
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 rest time
,
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 before we went out for play again. business.
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