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Nowadays, news companies spend a lot of money covering international news. However, local news is more relevant to people’s lives and should receive more funding.’ To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#news #companies #money #people’s #lives
Journalism is
a
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 art of showcasing the world with all the current affairs around the world and
examine
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examining
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 the impact of that on people.
News
 companies tend to invest a large amount of money to cover international
news
 whereas
neglect
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neglecting
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 local
news
 which resonates more with
local
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the local
a local
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 audience and I completely disagree with
this
 gesture. Developing countries like India, China and Bangladesh are still attracted to foreign nations and try to replicate their culture and way of living. And as we know everything comes with
price
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a price
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 and
this
 human
curosity
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curiosity
 has led to invest more money to cover international stories.
For example
, a person living in the rural part of India has more
curosity
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curiosity
 to know about the results of the American presidential elections and
tend
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 to keep
close
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a close
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 eye on the whereabouts of that country. The craze for foreign
nations
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nations'
nation's
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 seed has been planted by these
news
media
 in the population of these growing nations so that they can act and walk like them. There are many local
news
 channels which do
there
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their
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 job faithfully and try to showcase the real
news
 which can make difference in local citizens but they are supported well financially as the viewers are less. Advertisement
organisation
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organisations
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 don't approach these
media
 houses as they have minimal audience attention and that impacts the growth.
Furthermore
, these local
media
 are not backed by the local government which not only impacts the employment ratio of the country but
also
deviate
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deviates
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 citizens from actual problems which can affect their lives.
Therefore
, it is important for governments to be active in dealing with
this
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these
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 situations.
Central
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The central
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 government should provide subsidies to local
news
 anchors and broadcasters, hire social
media
 influencers to improve viewership of
this
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these
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 channels and allocate more
fund
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funds
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 so that they can display the real picture of what we are than what we want to. To conclude, it is important for governments to take wise measures and educate people to watch more which really matters.
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